Nowadays leisure industry products and modern gadgets are widely used by young people. The use of these products reduces the young generation’s creativity. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.
The popularity of exciting products and advanced devices has skyrocketed among adolescents in the last decade. Majority of people believe that using these gizmos can decrease the level of youth’s innovation. Others think juveniles who utilize these productions have a more creative mind than other teenagers. From my perspective, I have bipolar attitudes towards this viewpoint.
On the one hand, excessively using new technologies such as smartphones and video games can waste people’s free time instead of consuming their time to innovate and create new products. Statistics show that 80 percent of teenagers spend at least 25 hours each week on using their cellphone, watching TV or playing games. This adolescents live in a fictitious world of their own and often have trouble building relationships with others. They can’t imagine an existence without their gadgets and get panic attacks if they don’t have access to their machines. In other words, these people will find it difficult to survive if they would be in a world where there is no internet or smartphone.
On the other hand, new gadgets and modern tools are leverages to enhance the young not only to experience an unreal world without any limitation and boundary but also to unleash their creativity. These devices can provide vital supporting tools for the creative process. For instance, designing and editing software such as Photoshop allow their users to push the boundaries and create original, artistic photos. Moreover, they inspire adolescents to devise more innovative inventions. According to Sina Naderi researcher at the University of Cambridge, playing particular games can improve imaginations of mind.
In conclusion, recent tools can have positive and negative impacts on youngsters’ creativeness. I strongly agree with the notion that these affects are depended on both how much time the young spend on these devices and why youthful people use these gizmos.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'at least', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in other words', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259036144578 0.247107548796 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.16265060241 0.15552993741 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10843373494 0.0946569551029 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0301204819277 0.0501201869031 60% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0451807228916 0.0437536398559 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114457831325 0.122223957237 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0421686746988 0.0403219363162 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81556194008 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0271084337349 0.0326786765898 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0873493975904 0.0861751148067 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0210843373494 0.0214082191602 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0120481927711 0.0119246538136 101% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1964.0 1933.38276553 102% => OK
No of words: 306.0 316.052104208 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.39739413681 6.10592293882 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20519365927 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.388888888889 0.37474360046 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.33660130719 0.284197041944 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.228758169935 0.203843217982 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.16339869281 0.137313986986 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81556194008 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640522875817 0.560935902166 114% => OK
Word variations: 76.3649922319 60.7401812628 126% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0911823647 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.125 20.7725350517 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5904273684 49.5273876611 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5900621118 93.4120437189 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2049689441 15.2821509519 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.546583850932 0.594174754866 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01102204409 20% => OK
Readability: 52.785130719 49.1922392462 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.74683544304 1.69127372897 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.25858762365 0.332604825255 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0664012401232 0.102734651613 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0362363040471 0.0668474354756 54% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.462764434783 0.534917948617 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130198607766 0.148666948902 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857016097312 0.13441755203 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668700637707 0.0742828286743 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.249165472625 0.324241079732 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0568318647493 0.0640056729886 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173660134815 0.22793763319 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258412319864 0.0582452615562 44% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41883767535 29% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.88977955912 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.60220440882 115% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.00200400802 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 8.0 10.493987976 76% => OK
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Rates: 80.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.5 Out of 9