Nowadays more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same job
The job market has become more competitive as more older
people start to apply for the same positions as younger
people. This phenomenon leads to several severe problems,
and some feasible solutions would be analyzed in the essay
below.
There are a number of negative outcomes from such a
competition between young and old job applicants. First,
young people have to compete with older people who have
accumulated more experience, which means that young
people might fail to find work. This, consequently, heightens
unemployment rates, causing social unrest and crime
escalation. Second, if old job seekers cannot compete with
young people in certain fields that require great versatility
and creativity like sales or marketing, they might not get a
job. Without adequate financial means to support their
family and themselves, elderly people might have to live in
poverty.
The government should take some immediate actions to
mitigate this situation. New policies should be established in
order to provide old people with sufficient social benefits,
old-age pensions and medical care included, so that they
can live comfortably when they retire. Another effective
solution is to fix retirement age over which no one is by law
employed by any institutions or companies. This will reduce
the level of competition for the same jobs between the
young and the old and empower young people to increase
their chances of getting their wanted positions.
In conclusion, the mentioned competition could produce
undesirable issues to both old and young job applicants, and
the government certainly play a tremendous role in tackling
those problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...b market has become more competitive as more older people start to apply for the same pos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58139534884 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75104254457 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639534883721 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5359680472 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 28.0 4.38176352705 639% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330869860333 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110577639469 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139544937963 0.0667982634062 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734511853633 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981822778002 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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