People nowadays live longer than they used to.
What caused this situation?
Is it a negative or positive development?
In today's world,the life expectancy has surged in almost every countries. And, various reasons can be portrayed for this good alternation. However, an excessive strengthens of lives has now brought a heap of negative impinge on elderly people.
It is true that, nowadays, an advanced in medical science and technology have brought up an enormous facilities in many parts of the world. Similarly, improvement in medicines, vaccinations and successful diagnosis of drugs for the hideous diseases have helped to prolong the humans' lives. Also, a huge number of comuputers and machines at the workplace have shrinked the role of workers, which eventually bring a massive flexibility and efficiency on the work. Due to this, the people are getting even more chances to indulge without a bunch of tensions. Furthurmore, owing to the privilege of a pension for older peoples, their lives now have illuminated spectacularly. Moreover, the presence of the many buildings, chiefly, for elderly citizenries are in an escalating trend, which surprisingly sustain them with colorful lives. Another aspect regarding this topic is, lifts in the different malls and hotels are now widened. Consequently, it is eradicating peoples' effort to walk, which have heighten their lives a bit longer.
Certainly, a pique in life expectancy have had an unprecedented impact on countries. Firstly, the surging rate of elderly residents have brought a huge pangs in the family. It is to say that, certain member have to perpatuate time to guard their older members. However, most peoples, nowadays, are business workers, therefore, it would be a quite sophisticated for them to managed the time for that. Secondly, burden for the goverment. It means, the authorities have to dispersed a large sum of money in order to fortify the lives of older inhabitants. Last but not least, elimination of young generations' views and ideas for the progress of a nation, as the majority of people often give priorities to elderly citizenries' thoughts,owing to their experienced in a related fields.
In conclusion, I personally think that, an advancement in terms of technology and science as well as the support from government, peoples now are able to experience a bit more years. Such joy, however, has now brought the drop on nations rather than the boon.
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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake regardless of whether the course is useful to an employee.
What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?
University education has become a matter of discussion among the people. Some argue that it should be totally job-oriented, whilst others oppose these views saying it should not be the requirements of the workforce. However, In my opnion, university should be focused on the course required in the future workplace.
In this present scenario, humans' lives have become a complicated to survive, due to a poor financial backgrounds. Considering this issue, people are often preparing themselves, working hard on their education since their secondary school, in order to achieved a good job with an attractive salary in the future days. In recent times, if university does not dispersed a job-oriented educations and skills, then it will be a very sophisticated for one to get a job of their choice. This will be totally a waste of their hard work, the dedication and the money that they have invested into their education.
On the other hand, provision of knowledges which are non-relevant to job may sustain the people to be intellectually talents, and somewhere to think critically and to come up with a novel ideas. However, such information may not be fruitful for them in the context of granting a suitable work. In present generation, doing job means not only to work, but also to fortify the living standards, which is now cardinal concerned of every peoples'. Thus, higher a good education relevant to job, higher the level of happiness including a better living styles.
In conclusion, it has been contemplated that educations and skills ,which are not related to the workforce create an unprecedented impinge on peoples' lives. Therfore, I personally believe, university should give a prodigious priority on future jobs too whilst providing education to graduates.
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in almost every countries.
in almost every country.
an excessive strengthens
an excessive strength
an advanced in medical science and technology have brought up
an advanced medical science and technology have brought up
a pique in life expectancy have had an unprecedented impact
a pique in life expectancy has had an unprecedented impact
the surging rate of elderly residents have brought a huge pangs
the surging rate ... has brought a huge pangs
certain member have to perpatuate
certain members have to perpatuate
it would be a quite sophisticated for them to managed the time
it would be quite sophisticated for them to manage the time
have to dispersed a large sum of money
have to disperse a large sum of money
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Sentence: It is to say that, certain member have to perpatuate time to guard their older members.
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Sentence: Secondly, burden for the goverment.
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