Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities Others however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required Discuss both these views and give opini

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give opinions.

it is generally considered that providing more sport amenities is the best solution in improving people's health. Nevertheless, others argue that it's not enough because it could only bring a minor influence and another ways are needed to be taken in order to promote health. In this essay, i will discuss both arguments and insert my own opinion.

To begin with, nowadays, some people find it difficult to improve their health because of the inadequate of sport accommodations that are provided to the public. Thus, they cannot use the facilities sufficiently and their fitness level are tend to become lower. To illustrate, many people are trying to register as a member in particular gymnastic studio but it is already full, so they wont be able to work out there. In addition, the government should creat new spaces and encompass more sport amenities in order to espouse the public to do sports and become more healthy. By doing that, there would be less problems that related to difficulty in finding a place to do sports which sometimes exasperate the society who want to increase their fitness.

However, there's also several measures that are necessary when we want to enhance our health aside from the number of amenities that help us to exercise. For instance, we can do a daily regular exercises which can make us become fit and it can also prevent a heart disease. another step is by consuming more healthy food and try to avoid junk food which is ineffective for our health. Moreover, regulating our sleeping time considerably and getting away from the harmful of smoke could make our fitness level more better.

In conclusion, I completely believe that the availability of a large number of sport accommodations is not sufficient because it could only bring a tiny effect. Therefore, more actions is needed in order to recover and upgrade our prestigious health.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it is generally considered that providing ...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...order to promote health. In this essay, i will discuss both arguments and insert ...
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Line 3, column 606, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun problems is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... healthy. By doing that, there would be less problems that related to difficulty in ...
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Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... to increase their fitness. However, theres also several measures that are necessar...
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Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'exercise'?
Suggestion: exercise
...For instance, we can do a daily regular exercises which can make us become fit and it can...
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Suggestion: Another
...nd it can also prevent a heart disease. another step is by consuming more healthy food ...
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Line 7, column 62, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...letely believe that the availability of a large number of sport accommodations is not sufficient ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97777777778 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70323378846 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580952380952 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2378139505 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208753546043 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695528847812 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561505811571 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12418681509 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619950552107 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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