Computers nowadays play a crucial role in our life, as they are used in many areas of work. For example, it is used to improve the quality of health care system, in authorities investigations and in many economical and financial aspects. This essay will show some expected uses of this technology in the future.
In many countries, all the population is registered in the governmental devices with a complete set of informations about them. Then, this database might totally substitute employers of the civilian registration councils. Any person can easily apply to any document( like passports, identity cards, driving licenses and so on ) by internet and all the information needed will be available on-line.
Education became increasingly dependent on computers. While few lectures still write the lesson on the board, most of the universities use projection multimedia to present the lectures and sometimes a hand out copies are given to the students. Huge references which are taken from the libraries became part of the past.hundreds of such textbooks could now be found in small storage hard disks.
However, we can not depend too much on computers in every thing. They can not work as a policeman who puts himself in danger to save life of innocent people. Although an airplane without a pilot was a dream, is actually a nightmare because all the passengers lives depend on a machine which might got corrupted at any time.
To sum up we can say inspite of the fact that computers are important, and they definitely provide incredible facilities to our life, there are some points in which they could not play the role of the human being as perfect as one can do. So we should keep some sort of independence on them.
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Sentence: Although an airplane without a pilot was a dream, is actually a nightmare because all the passengers lives depend on a machine which might got corrupted at any time.
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Sentence: To sum up we can say inspite of the fact that computers are important, and they definitely provide incredible facilities to our life, there are some points in which they could not play the role of the human being as perfect as one can do.
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