6.It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

6. It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, an increasing number people are concerned about that pupils must learn about their country history than other countries which are more important. I completely disagree with this opinion, the simple reason that I believe that schools should teach local, nation and world history.
On the one hand, it is significant that children should learn about their nation history when they go to school. There are several reasons that they should learn about their country. Firstly, knowing about makes children aware of the events of their country’s past. For example, when Vietnamese student learns about their nation country, it will be providing knowledge about the way of life and liberty which Ho Chi Minh president bring to their nation. They know how do their president find the way to help their country escape their enemy. Secondly, schoolchildren will learn how important local cultural traditions have developed. As a result, they will gain a deeper understanding of each traditional event, and be motivated to carry on the best custom for generations to come.
On the other hand, there are several valuable in world history. Students might be studying about historical of other countries over the world, the reason that it will develop an understanding of past experiences of other people. For example, learn about The Second World War can help them to know about the war killed over 61 million people over the world. Moreover, learning about wars in the past will help children become respect what do they have at the moment. It is haven by their forbear and there are various people died to have this liberty.
In conclusion, I think that schools must teach their student about not only local history but also the nation and world history.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'valuables'?
Suggestion: valuables
.... On the other hand, there are several valuable in world history. Students might be stu...
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Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...hat it will develop an understanding of past experiences of other people. For example, learn abo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08275862069 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47269031301 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524137931034 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3807229372 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273179604416 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100331763459 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572233335385 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187536595591 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328569367387 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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