Accomodation and transport problems are increasing in many large cities. Businesses are encouraged to move to rural areas . Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

Many people believe that in order to solve housings and transportation issues in many big cities today, governments should relocate businesses to the countryside. While I accept such policies can have some benefits, I would argue that the drawbacks it has are more significant.

On the one hand, moving businesses to suburban areas can solves some major problems. Firstly, by relocating big organisations, many transportation issues in the city centre coule be solved. The relocations of businesses mean office workers will have to change their commuting habits. Everyday, they will go outside the city centre, which helps solving traffic congestion in the urban areas. Secondly, in order to save time, many workers will move to the countryside, resulting in the reduction of population density in the city. A smaller number of people living in the city means the housings problems will be less significant.

On the other hand, these policies can have some drawbacks. The first one is that far away businesses will adversely affect citizens' lives. Moving businesses to the rural areas means that people will have to spend more time for transportation. For example, supermarkets being moved to suburban areas will make daily shopping cost more time and energy for city shoppers. Additionally, the relocations will make the links between businesses disappear. The reason why many businesses choose to stay in the city is to saving costs. Imagine if suppliers have to travel hundred kilometers more to reach consumers, such changes can result in the loss of billion dollars per year. By located in the city, businesses can perform in the most effective way.

In conclusion, I believe that the drawbacks of businesse relocations outweigh its benefits.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
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Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[2]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
... have to change their commuting habits. Everyday, they will go outside the city centre, ...
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Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to solve' or 'solve'.
Suggestion: to solve; solve
...go outside the city centre, which helps solving traffic congestion in the urban areas. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29749103943 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88298176714 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562724014337 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8721180156 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.9411764706 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166368474735 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581297230613 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474600416897 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997437682772 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325869115927 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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