Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us want to be and to look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are a debated topic that wheather advertising diminish the uniqueness of individuals by making people have the same lifestyle. Personally, I disagree with this opinion.
The power of advertising is undeniable. The significant growth of advertising industry has influenced on shopping choices of consumers. Advertising provides people with useful information about products, so they can decide wheather they should buy products or not. Therefore, many people buy products of the same manufacture after watching advertising because they find it proper with their aim. For example, a big company that dominate most the market share is Unilever, they push their marketing campaigns by advertising frequently on the television. This make people all over the world can aware of and buy the company’s products.
However, the difference of individuals is not lessen because of advertising. On the one hand, people have ability to avoid becoming the victims of advertisements. People have different characteristics, so when they tend to buy a product, they will take into consideration that wheather this product is approriate with their real situation. Besides, there is a growing tendency that people want to specialize themselves. People, especially young people, are ambitious for proving they are unique and they are not look like someone else. For example, many cosmetic branches or clothing branches have promoted and launched some limited products every year such as lipsticks or shirts. This has impacts on the expectation of many people of becoming distinctive.
In conclusion, I firmly hold the view that advertisements do not make people less specific.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'topics'?
Suggestion: topics
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'peoples'.
Suggestion: peoples
...frequently on the television. This make people all over the world can aware of and buy...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lessened'.
Suggestion: lessened
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, look, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5568627451 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09812360272 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592156862745 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0180878004 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5625 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9375 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181917262667 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686520333707 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484745679991 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139617006469 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392090296355 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.67 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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