Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction Do you agree or disagree Provide relevant examples if necessary

Some people claims that having much salary is crucial than a satisfactory work environment. It is true that more salary creates better lifestyle; however, there is a serious disagreement on this issue, because each person needs to spend more time with his family and a friendly work environment to satisfy his job rather than getting big salary with full of stressed work.

Firstly, people would like to spend more time with their family. Unfortunately, jobs with big salary usually have very heavy work conditions. It takes long hours to finish compulsory tasks and have more leisure time to be with the family or friends. Managers usually demand range of tasks and press the employees. For example, according to the research carried out by Oxford University, 80% of employees give up working such kind of works after maximum 2 years.

Moreover, a friendly work environment is very important for most people. It decreases the level of stress and gives employees to overcome challenges easily in comparison with a depressed environments. Because scientists prove that an employee with less stressful conditions would be more beneficial that the ones who is under full of stress. For instance, based the surveys carried out by New York Times, in UK, 40% companies increased their profits after making amendments on work conditions, such as more flexible, less depressed and with organizing some team buildings.

In conclusion, notwithstanding big salary rises a person's life standards up, it is better to spend more time with your relatives and working less stressful work conditions in order to satisfy his job. Money could not be a primary asset in a person's life.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'environment'?
Suggestion: environment
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...Money could not be a primary asset in a persons life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15808823529 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76364722769 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591911764706 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3761784187 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.923076923 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9230769231 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137032708504 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531731826262 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537059493308 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981426616618 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534778557748 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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