Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?
Consequences of playing games containing violent contents is usually a controversial topic. In my opinion, I partly agree with the idea that violent electronic and computer games which are played by children is the main culprit that contribute to the increase in violence and crime in big cities of the world.
It is undeniable that playing violent games may affect the behaviors of children. Children may mimic action in the video games which contain violent content such as murdering or stabbing. For example, a teenager may imitate using a gun like which presents in the games. However, he or she does not aware of the danger of this action. As a result, he or she may hurt people around him or her and therefore becomes a criminal. Those like this example are quite popular in the big cities where children living there are have more chance to expose with those electronic and computer games.
In spite of those arguments given above, I believe that violent games are not the only reason which results in the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. Violent behavior of children may be contributed by not only by unhealthy contents of video games but also the family background. For instance, if a child has to witness the violent scene of his or her parents within his or her family for a long time, he or she may be obsessed with the idea to mimic those action and that could also lead to the cruel thinking and real actions.
In conclusion, although violent games may make violence and crime increase in the most big cities of the world, I would argue that this not the only factor for this situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: had
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Suggestion: this electronic; those electronics
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Message: Did you mean 'this action' or 'those actions'?
Suggestion: this action; those actions
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68512110727 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43552901499 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477508650519 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4955916184 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.833333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.75 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341311364033 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129527343057 0.084324248473 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983514379534 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238815633752 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665730935506 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.