Countries(where there is high unemployment)most pupils should be offered only primary education, there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Countries(where there is high unemployment)most pupils should be offered only primary education, there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that whether students should be given only primary education instead of secondary education or higher, especially in those countries having high unemployment rate. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this point of view seeing that educational settings equip schoolchildren with not only necessary knowledge, but also basic codes of conduct, which are of great important for those future job applicants.
Those proponents who advocate with this statement believe that rudimentary knowledge gained from primary schools is sufficient for those students to embark on their career, rather than pursue higher education. However, it is a mistaken belief seeing that this knowledge is only the founder and play almost no role in children’s future. For example, with literacy and numeracy skills attained from primary schools, job hunters cannot secure a decent job, notably those require high level of mathematic skills like accountant. Those knowledge, in deed, play important part in eleminate illiracy in disadvantaged countries like Africa, where residents have low intellectual level.
Besides teaching useful know-how relevant to future career path, secondary education also offer students social etiquette, which is vital for them to become the productive members of their society. It is true that many school leavers turn to crime career after being discharged from schools in default of proper guidance from teachers. It is easier for them to fall foul of the law and be led astray by their ill-mannered peers. As a result, their society have to deal with not only unemployment but also high crime rate.
In conclusion, I completely disagree with the idea that it is only primary education that is important for schoolchildren, especially those are believed that willnot have a job in their future.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 530, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'Those knowledges'?
Suggestion: This knowledge; Those knowledges
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, second, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44014084507 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83389898123 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580985915493 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1900493738 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.454545455 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72727272727 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267276366963 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101152828924 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695105949891 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168211140008 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530885492936 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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