In countries where there is high unemployment most pupils should be offered only primary education there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

In countries (where there is high unemployment) most pupils should be offered only primary
education; there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope
of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Chronic joblessness has been highlighted as an emerging issue, escaping broader public attention. Although the suggestion prioritising formal secondary education for academically- promising students over hopeless ones appears reasonable, it could be fraught with many pitfalls.

On the one hand, students should be offered equal secondary education opportunities irrespective of their primary academic perfomances. Since primary education only equip students with rudimentary knowledge such as reading, writing and numeracy skills for their social integration rather than academic expertise related to future occupations, students’ employment prospects could not be precisely anticipated. For instance, many individuals with subpar primary attainments could perform outstandingly in subjects not taught in primary educational insitutions such as formal literacy, athletic sports and languages, thereby raising their employablity.

On the other hand, the suggestion could have a multitude of negative ramifications. First, as outstanding primary performers are usually in minority, prioritising these individuals could culminate in the oversaturation of human recources but the insufficiency in educated workforce, which could hamper the national economic development. Second, people without proper secondary education are invariably associated with structural unemployment in a nation. It is implied that these unemployable workers have to recline on pecuniary unemployment assistance from the government, constituting a large chunk of national monetary budget, reducing capital injections into other public sectors such as infrastructure or healthcare.

In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the initiative of not giving secondary education to students based on their primary achivements. This practice could result in great negative effects on national economic advancements and societies’ living standards in the long term.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, as for, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.52895752896 5.12529762239 127% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33611736076 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656370656371 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.1 1.60771543086 131% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3786250493 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.727272727 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5454545455 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112960662623 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491801289404 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434732991026 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663556595476 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175132337917 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.1 13.0946893788 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 5.83 50.2224549098 12% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.2 11.3001002004 161% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 20.89 12.4159519038 168% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.36 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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