In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing population.

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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing population.

As society develops, the longevity becomes a common sense. However, due to this, the several problems could affect at different levels of society. While individuals suffer from a huge tax burden in order to support elders, society will suffer from ageing employees which could prevent the economy to move forward. Therefore, longevity is needed an immediate approach to put a halt to it by tackling down with number of approaches.
The medical technology has been developed significantly. As a result of this, the average of people’s age is increasing and it is common to expect to live about 100 years. Due to this longevity, there are several problems that affect society at a different level.
Individuals have to pay higher taxes in order to support for elders’ various entitlements such as pensions, health care and superannuation. In the case of Australia, 1 young employee has to cover for 5 elders to pay off all their entitlements in the form of taxes. Therefore, the income taxes are rising every year and which make it difficult for young people to save up their money for themselves.
Meanwhile, society will be suffered from having too many senior employees, because they will not retire at an early age for the bored and loneliness reasons. This would be problematic because elders tend to be the risk averse and this is difficult to survive in this fast pace, innovative world. For example, Tesla has invented for auto pilot cars while Samsung created bio-metric identification and these were possible due to creative and innovative thought by young generations. As a result of this, it appears that the immediate action is required.
To solve this issue, the number of methods can be used. Firstly, the government can manage the tax more effectively. Instead of using young employee’s taxes to pay off elder’s entitlement, use young employees’ taxes to invest for the better payments for elder’s entitlement later on. Finally, society also can provide programs where elders can be innovative by training them to be used to the newest technologies. By providing this number of approaches at different level, it can solve effectively.
In conclusion, the longevity can create various problems to society and individuals in the form of taxes and the huge amount of retirement issues. To solve this issue, the government and the society can provide the appropriate solutions together.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242358078603 0.247107183377 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.148471615721 0.155533422707 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0938864628821 0.0946595960268 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0349344978166 0.0501214627716 70% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0218340611354 0.0437548338989 50% => OK
Prepositions: 0.11135371179 0.122226691241 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0371179039301 0.0403226058552 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99345240026 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0502183406114 0.0326793684256 154% => OK
Particles: 0.00873362445415 0.00163938923432 533% => OK
Determiners: 0.0938864628821 0.0861772015684 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.028384279476 0.021408717616 133% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00873362445415 0.011925033212 73% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2431.0 1933.35771543 126% => OK
No of words: 393.0 316.048096192 124% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18575063613 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20517956788 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391857506361 0.374742101984 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282442748092 0.28420135186 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203562340967 0.203846283523 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.152671755725 0.137316102897 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99345240026 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.037074148 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521628498728 0.56093040696 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 57.7701343345 60.7387585426 95% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0891783567 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.7142857143 20.7743622355 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8183854356 49.517814964 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.761904762 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.7743622355 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.814263465372 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 46.9585605234 49.1944974215 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.90425531915 1.69124875643 113% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427577410836 0.332605444948 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0872531805945 0.102741220458 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0742899053161 0.0668466124924 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.537664932835 0.534860350844 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146042103505 0.148594505496 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160085567986 0.134430193775 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679889993846 0.0742795772207 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.308007782982 0.324371583561 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0634543672603 0.0638462369009 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273280683319 0.228012699653 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503900162861 0.058150111329 87% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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