Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself.

Essay topics:

Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself.

It is argued that authorities should not need to provide care or support finance for senior citizens because it is each person's duty to plan for retirement and self-supporting. Although I agree that personal welfare should be an individual's responsibility, I also disagree with the point of view that government should not support money for elderly people.
There are several reasons why I disagree with this notion. Firstly, some old people who are poor, live alone and do not have any children often cannot depend on anyone. Secondly, the cost of living is rising day by day and older people are too weak to work. This may lead to the fact that those senior citizens are unable to meet the need of their lives. Thirdly, nowadays many elderly people have to suffer from a great deal of diseases, namely heart attack, cancer, zona and many other diseases that are really hard to treat, that is why they need help to afford the cost of treatment. Finally, I think it is governments’ role to support older people as they have been paying taxes throughout their lives and for this reason, old people have the right to take one part of the money back when they need.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that supporting financially for elder people may affect national’s budget. Many old citizens succeeded from their work before, therefore, they have enough money to pay for what they need. Besides, there are many more elderly people do not need financial support from the authorities such as those who have children and are taken care by their offspring. In terms of economic perspective, if every senior people were received monetary provide, this would result in a financial burden on governments’ shoulders. Furthermore, many people believe that it is more important for authorities to invest money on education and healthcare rather than elderly people.
In conclusion, governments should take responsibility of financial support to senior citizens and at the same time, it is individual's responsibility to save money for his or her future.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01749271137 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82532711189 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527696793003 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6595038893 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.928571429 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0714285714 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406723546344 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139701698492 0.084324248473 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115369897644 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278760402907 0.151304729494 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106723009254 0.056905535591 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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