It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child s development are media pop culture and friends A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A question that recently has gained much attention from the public is whether artistic forms such as social media platforms, mainstream cultures as well as friendships have more influence on the emotional development and frame of mind of young adolescents than the role of family attributes. On one hand, I am inclined to believe that external conditions beyond the control of family affect how the children perceive the world in many respects. On the other hand, a great deal of knowledge along with life aspects that are virtually hidden or limited by old family members in order to protect their children's innocence and purity.

To assess the influences outside family, we must bring social media into focus first. From a personal perspective, social media will have both positive and negative effects on mindset and emotion, which will ultimately decide the kinds of person they will grow into. Assuming a teenager was raised in an indoor condition including social media such as facebook or snapchat, little by little, the information that he is exposed to will determine if he will be a good member of society or an antisocial individual. Another source of influence, on-screen entertainment as well as musical lyrics, portraits violence images and offensive languages that are not appropriate for people under 18. In addition, the friends that a child hangs out with on a regular basis may lead him down the wrong path or may bring the best version out of him.

Although so far, one can readily draw the conclusion that youngsters are continually impacted by society, we must put family into perspective before judging whether one plays a significant role than the other. Having known us for all of our lives and experienced all the highs and lows of life, parents know what we should learn and what we should not. However, there are mothers and fathers who have unintentionally made mistakes in terms of laying the burden on the carrying shoulder of their children and prevent them from pursuing their dreams. For instance, A parent who failed to achieve what he or she set out to will desire the success of his or her child. And in doing so, he has mistakenly put his own child into a pressured position and taken away his right to be himself.

Taking both sides into consideration, they point me to the conclusion that society and family play an equal role in the development of a person. It is this back and forth interaction between internal and external conditions that will result in the unique set of characteristics and personality traits.

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Average: 9 (5 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y old family members in order to protect their childrens innocence and purity. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 432.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94212962963 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71632545858 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 176.041082164 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594907407407 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5271764059 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.333333333 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124895601714 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395959316131 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434723293372 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793359127103 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029491131387 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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