It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is more valued by your society? Give specif

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It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is more valued by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.

It is true that artists and scientists are playing valuable and irreplaceable roles in terms of contribution to our society. Artists keep people’s spirit alive and scientists impact on their physical lives, however, I believe that scientist’s contribution would be valued more in my society.

The contributions of artists to the society are very essential. Firstly, artists use creativity and explore different ways of perceiving, art makes life potentially more rich and more profound because it consider aspects of human life such as personal experience, social structures, spirituality, and perception. Furthermore, art can form person’s spiritual sense, their views, morality, spirit and personalities. For example, these art works help people release their stress or give comforts to people in their house or in the galleries. In addition, it is true that their art works are used to cultivate our mind, even though they sometimes inspire people to have different perspectives of different topics. For instance, we also watch movies that entertain and at the same time extend our range of interests.

In contrast, scientists are under constant effort to bring comfort to our life. Through new inventions, they aid society in overcoming the obstacles and challenges faced by their counterparts. Through scientists, we are able to achieve longevity, excellent discoveries avail us with new forms of energy, scientists come up with new ideas to improve our quality of life, almost every day. In addition to this, scientists are behind experiments and research to eliminate all possible threats from our society. Meanwhile, almost all huge machines to tiny kitchen equipment that we use in our daily life have a scientist’s effort behind. For example, we have internet where we can access to the immense source of knowledge or variety of medicines helps to cure many types of disease and prolong our lives.

In addition, I believe that even though the contributions of artists are important for our mental and emotional health, the contributions of scientists are more valued by my society. In my society, people give more attention to their physical health, and discoveries of new medicines and vaccines have cured people from the diseases such as chicken pox, measles, polio and malaria. Scientists have found medicine for ailments such as AIDs and cancers. Scientific contribution has saved many people from dying due to these diseases. Hence, scientists are rewarded more by my society.

In conclusion, an artist acts as a source of inspiration and information, whereas a scientist works as a source of innovations and inventions. Although artists also contribute much to the society and makes our society a better place to live, yet from our real life it seems that the contributions of scientists are valued more.

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Average: 6.7 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'considers'?
Suggestion: considers
... more rich and more profound because it consider aspects of human life such as personal ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, whereas, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 448.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37276785714 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0470434281 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515625 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.0 506.74238477 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.146758741 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.619047619 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273762420403 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963089939072 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101149826909 0.0667982634062 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186617740926 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842368756907 0.056905535591 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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