It is more important for school children to learn about their local history than the world history Do you agree or disagree Give your opinion and examples

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It is more important for school children to learn about their local history than the world history. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.

History broadens the horizon of one's knowledge about the past happenings. It has been controversial whether learning about the local history is of greater significance for juveniles than knowing about the world history or not. Here, i would like to discord with the given statement.

There are multifarious points to shore up my view. First and foremost, the knowledge of world history highlights the international scenario to clear the prospectives of someone at international level. To demonstrate, unlike local history, one can get informed about the policies of past leaders or distinct countries in terms of social, commercial and political matters by learning the world history. Apart from it, sacrifices of martyrs and examples of some most influential leaders of the world could be a source of inspiration and bravery. Therefore, one who gets informed about the history of entire globe finds it easy to settle himself at international level compare to an individual with the knowledge of only local history.

Further emphasizing on my point of view, the world history also portrays the world wars of former times with the comprehensive description of causes, effects and consequences. To be specific, knowing about the destruction of two major cities Hiroshima and Nagasaki in Japan can aware a person about the heart rendering results, exploitation and cruelty towards the mankind during world wars. Hence, having familiarity with the world history can make an individual better thinker and planner. On the contrary, others have contrasting views.

They think that being informed about local history makes a child respectful towards cultural, historic and ancestral values of his native country. More significantly, they can think of the sacrifices of martyrs and bravery shown by the leaders of their home country. Thus, teaching local history is worthwhile to install patriotic spirit among adolescents. On the flip side, world events may not have close association or direct linkage with their personal lives. Consequently, local history deserves more priority than global past.

To recapitulate, undeniably, the importance of local history can never be underestimated ; however, i still believe in this era of globalization, boundaries between nations are no longer of that importance. Therefore, providing lessons of world history is the need of an hour in the schools.

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Average: 4.3 (5 votes)

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'apart from', 'on the contrary']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.266343825666 0.247107183377 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.125907990315 0.155533422707 81% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108958837772 0.0946595960268 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0484261501211 0.0501214627716 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0266343825666 0.0437548338989 61% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145278450363 0.122226691241 119% => OK
Participles: 0.043583535109 0.0403226058552 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98517246415 2.80594681477 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0217917675545 0.0326793684256 67% => OK
Particles: 0.00242130750605 0.00163938923432 148% => OK
Determiners: 0.0871670702179 0.0861772015684 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0193704600484 0.021408717616 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00242130750605 0.011925033212 20% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2399.0 1933.35771543 124% => OK
No of words: 371.0 316.048096192 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.46630727763 6.12580529183 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20517956788 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.401617250674 0.374742101984 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.339622641509 0.28420135186 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.22371967655 0.203846283523 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.150943396226 0.137316102897 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98517246415 2.80594681477 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.037074148 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582210242588 0.56093040696 104% => OK
Word variations: 67.6217876531 60.7387585426 111% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5263157895 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6728574167 49.517814964 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.263157895 127.492653851 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.736842105263 0.814263465372 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 53.4885799404 49.1944974215 109% => OK
Elegance: 2.26506024096 1.69124875643 134% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322005337357 0.332605444948 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0858602237039 0.102741220458 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0732706898571 0.0668466124924 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.551661348535 0.534860350844 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.185988021188 0.148594505496 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140199821848 0.134430193775 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071141891957 0.0742795772207 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.398990901489 0.324371583561 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0905653530022 0.0638462369009 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234979515855 0.228012699653 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630374018801 0.058150111329 108% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1967 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.316 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.884 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.363 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5