It is more important for school student to learn about local history than the world history. Do you agree or disagree?
In this contemporary setting, history is given paramount importance, and some are of the opinion that local history should be given more emphasis than world history to students. Considering this situation, it is crucial to explore this from two perspectives.
To begin with, local history presenting ancestors’ thoughts and experience has some merits, as it is part an integral part of the education system. To be specific, local history can present causes and consequences of certain behaviours, which helps students to understand factors contributing to failure and success, thereby preventing them from repeating the same mistakes and integrating their ancestors’ experience with the current context. As a result, this helps students to improve their lives in their local society. Besides, those adopting their traditional culture will establish a sound moral value system, this is because cultural history contains an enormous value which helps young people to distinguish between right and wrong. Furthermore, it can prevent them from committing crimes. Consequently, local history tends to contribute to enhancing social cohesion.
On the other hand, by learning world history, students may gain benefits as well, as it plays an indispensable role in this holistic development. To be precise, teaching student world history tends to learn diverse values, traditions and customs, which broadens their horizon. Moreover,
They will cultivate a sense of empathy among other countries. For instance, many countries have experienced civil wars. When students study world history about other countries’ civil, it can integrate their sense of feelings and comprehension of wars into other ones. Therefore, this might result in fewer disputes among countries. Hence, it can devote to a harmonious society.
In conclusion, local history will have a fundamental role in improving students’ lives and enhancing social cohesion. However, by no means, should we turn a blind eye on the benefits of world history. Nevertheless, I strongly agree that it is pivotal for students to pay more attention to local history rather than world history.
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besides, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65538461538 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02435713742 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578461538462 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9384590306 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.111111111 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0555555556 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2777777778 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288061795789 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888697082224 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980150739552 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175450217353 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894991065683 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.25 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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