It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have different views about whether country’s history or international history is more necessary for children to study at schools. In my opinion, both types of history above are equally important, so I believe that it would be better for students to have a chance to acquire a knowledge of local history as well as world history.
On the one hand, the importance of studying local history at schools is certainly undeniable. It is true that local history can help bring a community together because no matter how different you are, you have shared history. When students learn about their own country’s history, they will feel somewhat proud of their country and like they ‘belong’ in their country. For example, by studying how people in the past gave up their lives so that Vietnamese juveniles will respect and be grateful more to the value of the way of life and liberty that they enjoy today they lead today. Moreover, through knowing about the local history, the young generations will know about the wonderful core values and precious lessons which have passed by ancestors. Japanese, for instance, have always been known as one of the most fortitude races in this world. This is due to the fact that they have learned from their war failures in the past.
On the other hand, studying world history is also very crucial for every child. Firstly, the trend of the world today is globalization and international integration, by interacting with other people from other cultures, a country can have opportunities to receive many marvelous achievements of countless fields from the world. However, this tendency obviously requires all people and especially children to have some knowledge of world history to form a mutual understanding in order to blend fully into this world community.
Secondly, all the countries in the world have to come through some certain stages of developing and revolution, and there were also some drawbacks of developing like slavery. Therefore, it is vital for the young generations who will become the leader of their country in the future to know about the lessons to be able to avoid those which are not good for their nation
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03581267218 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7658210134 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526170798898 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1391159845 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.571428571 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9285714286 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244333968215 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926468599098 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472125745355 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152880794006 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620630213375 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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