It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become good sports person or musician.
Discuss the two ideas giving your opinion.
That relationships nature and nurture of people to become an excellent person in some specific fields has controversial. It is argued that several people are born initially to be genius while others believed that anyone can be trained to become an accomplished person or musician.This essay will discuss both opinions.
To begin with, some people as soon as born with certain talents such as sport and art skills. First and foremost, some children inherited via their parents' genes. The fact shows that some people receive heredity factors from parents, therefore if their parents or relatives are well-known person in sport or music, it is easier for them to have special talent to become a good player.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that teaching method plays a vital role in orienting children to become a good person or musician. Firstly, there are a large number of people who are famous in some different sections are due to being taught well. For instance, children can be master some specific skills if they have a convenient condition to learn and practise regularly.In modern life, a lot of institutions are established to instruct children to become a professional player. In addition, environment also affect significantly on development of children. For example, if their parents spend more time playing instruments or sports since they were little, young people will inform the content of music or sport in their brain because children are young and they easily imitate what they see.
In my opinion, although it is as easy as pie for children who have extraordinary talents to become an excellent person in some areas, other children totaly have ability to be a good person if they are taught in a proper way and have good environment to develop their skills.
In conclusion, only minority of people who were born with certain talents like sport or art while the majority of children become a professional person depending on a range of elements. Therefore, both genius and the other children have a fair chance to become a well-known person or musician.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03757225434 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74702886709 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494219653179 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9692415327 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.076923077 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6923076923 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313513463022 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12034714467 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599143421571 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193262973983 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02962363255 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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