In many countries, imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people
believe that better education will be a more effective solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In various nations, prison sentence is a common punishment for offenders. While some hold the view
that training is more beneficial than custody, the other disagree. In my idea, education has more benefit
rather than other retributions. I will state the reasons for my view in this essay.
The most compelling reason for holding to my view is that prison sentence is useless to prevent
criminals from reoffending. Firstly, no practical change would happen in their life as a prisoner. As
committing crimes is a consequence of how people think and their mindset is, deep and real changes
should be created in their thoughts to turn over a new leaf. It would not be achieved unless appropriate
and adequate training schemes are considered. It can be really helpful for those who are enticed by
others to become an offender. Moreover, committing crimes is not only because of lack of education,
but also because of being jobless that may lead people to some offences: smuggling, mugging and theft
to earn money. If people learn a skill, their chance for finding a job will be increased. So, teaching a skill
can make offenders to find a job and possibility of reoffending would be lessened in this situation.
Another reason for my position is that being in a jail has some drawbacks as well as physical and mental
hurts and should be altered by another punishment such as education. Despite all protecting measures,
many diseases and injuries can be observed in jails. Sometimes, health condition is not acceptable in
prisons. Nor can a wide variety of viruses and bacteria exist there. In addition, it is common in jails that
criminals fall out with each other. So, some of them will be hurt. On the other hand, becoming
homesick, depressed and disappointed is one of the hazards that can threaten prisoners mentally.
In conclusion, prison sentence has some demerits that are really significant. However, many advantages
can be achieved by training criminals.
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...e offences: smuggling, mugging and theft to earn money. If people learn a skill, ...
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...drawbacks as well as physical and mental hurts and should be altered by another p...
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...cation. Despite all protecting measures, many diseases and injuries can be observ...
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...ly significant. However, many advantages can be achieved by training criminals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08231707317 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76885503851 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579268292683 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1965588682 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.380952381 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.619047619 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161091708334 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047887774346 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036092459314 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.048105353619 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260721226181 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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