Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?

A large number of foods and beverages are produced with high levels of sugar, which leads to numerous problems involving health. Hence, it is argued that these products should be raised in cost in order to lessen the consumption of sugar by people. I personally agree with this statement because some benefits are offered.

To begin with, this method would create a chance for people to change their habits. Particularly, if sugary products are more expensive, people who can not afford the costs may have to find alternatives that are cheaper. For example, when different types of soft drinks such as Coca-Cola, Pepsi and so on have higher prices than other healthy drinks, people would choose the latter with the aim of saving money. As a result, they could cut down on the level of sugar consumed, and avoid suffering from several health problems like hypertension or diabete.

However, some people claim that this solution will not bring considerable impacts on customers. They may believe that these days, people have a higher quality of life, and an increase in the cost of sugary products is too small to change their eating habits. But, I completely advocate the idea of making these goods more expensive as it not only influences customers but also has impacts on manufacturers. To be specific, a higher cost of sugary refreshments would lead to a decrease in selled products and further, a reduction in companies’ profits. Therefore, the manufacturers could divert their attention to healthier foods and drinks. For instance, a business specialising in juices that contain high levels of sugar may focus more on freshwater or non-sugar beverages if they provide more revenues. Clearly, customers would have less choices and drink more healthy drinks.

In conclusion, sugary products are harmful to people’s well-being and higher prices should be charged so as to help people change their eating habits and encourage manufacturers to divert their main business line.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
A large number of foods and beverages are produced with h...
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Line 5, column 838, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun choices is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...revenues. Clearly, customers would have less choices and drink more healthy drinks. ...
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Line 7, column 104, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ing and higher prices should be charged so as to help people change their eating habits ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19254658385 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7088027541 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568322981366 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2847025745 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.466666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319301000237 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977336491761 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617380478031 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197809074655 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410357942987 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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