Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

Essay topics:

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

It is true that tourists from any parts of the world will be effortlessly drawn to visit museums and historical places than the locals. Some explainations for this trend will be pointed out and imperative measures which should be taken by the government in order to address this situation will be constructively discussed in this essay.

There are two reasons why museums and historical sites fail to address the attention of local people, namely its unchanging features and services and its expensive entrance fee. As strict preservation rules are applied to remain their original features such as architecture or ornaments, there is no novel decoration or services since establishment. Local people living their entire life in this sites may hear all about the constant spectacular features in these sites from their family members, friends, or colleagues who visited before, thereby, they lose their interest of paying a visit to these places. Another barrier which hinders local people from going to see museums and historical places in their neighbourhood is the costly entrance fee. Culture Museum is the must-visit place in the northern of Vietnam, for example, fails to attract local people since they are living in dire living standard which they find difficult to sustain their life let alone paying money for these places.

Government should address the situation of the disinterest of local people towards visiting museums and historical sites by adopting two direct measures. First, preservation is associated with refreshment of exhibition display and services, hereby,it will draw the attention of local people within these places. Second, financial support should be given to visitors which relieve the pressure of extra money on visiting these places. By doing so, local people are incentive to visit the landmarks in their neighbourhood without waring monetary issue.

In conclusion, it seems to me that familiar features and costly fee for entrance disinterest local people to visit museum and historical places. Therefore, with an aim to attract more local visitors, government should innovate these places and reduce the entrance cost.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43916913947 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72165550941 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516320474777 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3561008313 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9230769231 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413846538314 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155684188598 0.084324248473 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609661654506 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256922903294 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364232678385 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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