Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries.While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages.Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries.
While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages.

Do you agree or disagree?

These days, many students have excellent chances to go to abroad to study part or full of their programs. There is a widespread belief that this type of system can be beneficial as well as inconvenient for them. I believe benefits have far edge over drawbacks. This essay will support my opinion with relevant examples.

Let us begin by looking at the disadvantages first. One of the most important drawbacks is that you have to start your life from scratch which tend to cause an immense distress to some students. To demonstrate, you have to look for fresh apartments, open recent bank accounts, overcome alien language barriers and along with others. The majority of students prefer to return to their native countries due to the failure to adapt to completely new habitat. Over and above that, in absence of families and relatives, it gets increasingly difficult to sustain in unfamiliar territory.

Turning to the other side of the argument, one of the most positives is that pupils can broaden their horizons. To put it in another way, these school children have to deal with pristine cultures, people and various languages. On their staying and learning process, they might discover incredible new foods, traditions and social atmosphere. For this reason, these trainees may be easily adapted to diverse situations which eventually enable them to become truly creative and an independent individuals.

Another advantage is that the perfect carrier opportunities can be built in the future. After finishing their study courses, they usually return with new perspectives of a cultural impact, a great education and a constant motivation to learn. Moreover, many indigenous organisations give high priorities over foreign qualifications. Needless to say, all of these look extremely tempting for a future employment.

To conclude, much as there are disadvantages as culture shock and so on, obvious advantages namely personal development and others would considerably outweigh any difficulties.

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Average: 8.1 (3 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'individual'?
Suggestion: individual
...ecome truly creative and an independent individuals. Another advantage is that the perfe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36392405063 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95535567116 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.670886075949 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8395343472 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1666666667 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 7.06120827912 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192600898666 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507126015798 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618045499246 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934735108094 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674876577211 0.056905535591 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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flaws:
Don't repeat same structure:

One of the most important drawbacks is that...
one of the most positives is that...
Another advantage is that...

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 316 350
No. of Characters: 1643 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.216 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.199 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.852 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.669 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.258 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.509 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Pronouns are not serious, but try use less pronouns as possible. IELTS examiners don't like pronouns (like 'I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence. We can always replace pronouns with something else or simply ignore them.

for example:

One of the most important drawbacks is that you have to start your life from scratch which tend to cause an immense distress to some students.

revised:
One of the most important drawbacks is starting the life from scratch which tends to cause an immense distress to some students.