Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purposes.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
It is widely acknowledged that the number of children taken or sent to other countries for a short-term, with the aim of expanding their knowledge, is increasing more and more. In this essay, an attempt will be made to discuss the merits and demerits of this phenomenon.
To begin with, the first advantage of sending children to another country is that they can expand their knowledge. To put it another way, they will have to spend all their time learning the culture of this country, the manners, the language and so on. That gives them a lo of chances to be successful when working in their future. Take my brother as an example. After five years studying abroad, now he has become a rich entrepreneur. He has a profound knowledge about the various customs of different countries, which is very convenient when working with foreigners. Therefore, studying in other countries certainly has a positive impact on the education of children.
However, on the other hand, there is also an obvious disadvantage of this phenomenon. This is because children can’t have enough care and protection of their parents. In other words, they will feel overwhelmed and insecure when they stress with their studies or when they can’t get on well with the people around them. That can cause them to make some wrong decisions, which are dangerous with their physical health. A clear example is Zhika Liu, who was born in China and went to Australia for his education. After only three months studying in Australia, he jumped from the 21st floor and died at that moment. Consequently, it is clear that being sent to other countries can cause a lot of negative thoughts for children.
In conclusion, this phenomenon could bring about certain benefits, but its negative consequences should not be overlooked.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95695364238 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70365201573 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586092715232 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7989577014 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0588235294 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199880656945 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633041052342 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048550231898 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113653787994 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457977540586 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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