One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

According to Moyers, development is the unidirectional growth of a single celled organism into multicellular terminating into death. Thus, death is inevitable to anyone born, but each and everyone of us strives to live a fulfilling life. in this effort we become addicted to living, to family, our friends and we want to postpone the imminent as long as possible. Medical care was basically improved with this as one of the sole purposes. And accordingly, the life expectancy has dramatically increased over a last few decades.

People, as they age, with their experiences become wise and can guide the younger generations better. Scientific progress can be done with the failures and experiences of the elder as guidance. Grandchildren will not be left with caretakers as their parents work, because they will have their grandparents to love care ad nurture them. The ailing will no doubt be relieved and the loss and heartbreak of losing a beloved one will be reduced. Soulmates can revel in the togetherness for a little while longer. The heritage will not just be in the family tress but could be seen, heard and talked to. family's would come together for the special occasions and the bond between them would strengthen. This fraternity would inspire everyone and a sense of unity will be forged. The bountiful love will no doubt make this planet a better place.

But as with every progress their are cons along with the pros. The increasing life expectancy with advance medical care, obviously proves a curse to those unlucky few, who do not age as gracefully as many of us others. A moribund patient is sometimes kept alive just due to understanding desperation of the family. Such patients are sometime subjected to undue pain with intravenous injections when some of the organs could be well be donated to the one with irrepairable damage due to any adversities. No doubt the elder generations think through for us on many occasions, but sometimes old habits are hard to die. Their well meaning advice may be perceived as nosing around or are sometimes genuienly outdated for the coming of age people. such are the times when the old should know when their prowess has finished and should gracefully retire. if the do not retire on their own and continue to exert their authority when it no longer relevant, it will result in stumping of the new ideas, hampering renaissance of the modern age. In case of patients who fall in category four of association of anaesthetologists, euthanasuia is the boon.

So yes, the company of our elders is no doubt enjoyable and one that we all yearn for, but the ailments accompanying must also be taken care of competently. Otherwise the increasing age will be nothing more than a nuisiance.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, may, so, then, thus, well, while, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 464.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91810344828 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83398862523 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558189655172 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6479436619 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.28 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.56 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 7.06120827912 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127792310517 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368306572278 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516713501107 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862462696279 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593146186623 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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