The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Road safety has been highlighted as an emerging issue in recent decades due to an exponential increase in traffic fatalities from automobile vehicles. Although the prevalent suggestion emphasizing the imposition of stricter punishments on driving offenses can be feasible, I partially agree since other measures are proved to be more effective.

On the one hand, it is true that harsher sanctions on driving violations could increase road safety. Specifically, lawmakers could promulgate more rigorous administrative condemnations or even categorize some driving offenses as criminal acts, any drivers’ intentions of driving recklessly would be subject to self-resconsideration since the legal liabilities are extremely burdensome. For example, in Vietnam where driving under the influence is the leading cause for road accidents, the central government have adopted the new policy, raising the administrative penalties to 5000$ for any activities of drunk driving and 10000$ for driving under recreational drugs, making Vietnam’s road fatality rate drop by 15% the following year.

On the other hand, more effective solutions could be implemented for the betterment of road safety. First, by official authorities employing more intensive driver education programmes following with real-time driving practices with qualified instructors and simultaneously eliminating corrupted driving test supervisors, driving license holders would be outfitted with proper traffic code, vehicle operation knowledge, instructional driving strategies compatible with various weather conditions and driver impairments. In fact, in Vietnam, drivers often bribe test supervisors for qualification without class attendance, making the increase in the number of unqualified and uneducated drivers an inevitable product, worsening the perennial road accident issues. In addition, if motor manufacturers could integrate artificial intelligence technologies with advancements sensors such as lane departure warnings, blind spot warning system and automatic braking, which are synchronized with human controls, safety innovations could be ensured, thereby reducing significant traffic accidents in the future.

In conclusion, in order to improve road safety, it is not enough to be tough on traffic crimes by punishing more harshly those who violate the law. A range of road safety measures should accompany harsher driving penalties.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 24.0651302605 21% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17455621302 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23397683066 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647928994083 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.445127883 49.4020404114 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 189.727272727 106.682146367 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7272727273 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174054260798 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742395468596 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400707661281 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124772479772 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380911075986 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 13.0946893788 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 15.65 50.2224549098 31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.3001002004 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.1 12.4159519038 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.24 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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