In the past shopping was a routine domestic task Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby To what extent do you think this is a positive trend

Essay topics:

In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Recently, the shopping become popularity among the people. As a way, they consider it like having a recreation and a rest or at least as a hobby, however, in the past shopping was a routine of household task, which was approached weekly or monthly. I believe that this extent is influenced negatively.

Firstly, it is worth to note that shopping is crucial as well as require some challenge. By the way, hobby is something that people do daily or in their spare time. From one hand, it is a good while to have a hobby means to have a spare time, which is main factor for complacency. There is a one snag, after going to their hobby, e.g. for shopping, people are lavishing their money to unnecessary thing or even to schlock. That would be insensible when it is done once a year, but frequency detriments a budget.

Secondly, the main contrast from shopping is inappropriate controlling of time management. Instead of attending some kind of educational programs, extracurricular and sport activities, people are wasting their time on doing shopping. People should understand and reflect what is crucial for them at all.

Finally, the shopping makers are more suffered from modern mode or vague. As the result they begin to wear like their celebrities do. In contrast, it is the way by what people vanish or even lose their traditions as well as mentality.

In conclusion, it should be noted that everything would be intrinsically when it used in adequate and proper way. People must avoid from one in order to achieve another. Everyone is responsible for their acts.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (15 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, e.g., finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, well, while, at least, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, kind of, as well as, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87732342007 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81481136665 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57249070632 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0115626189 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1764705882 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8235294118 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179287172726 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536222714283 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047205358478 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102382002007 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695557971324 0.056905535591 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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