Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The World Cup football match and the Olympics are held worldwide with great national support and expectations. As a fan of those competitions, I agree with the idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national unity. In this essay, I will think about the effects of these popular sporting events.

First of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international games work for easing tensions among different nations. For example, South and North Korea have football games regularly which give two nations a chance to understand each other deeply. In the mid 1990s, a hundreds of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through the sports, two divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel the patriotic unity.

On the other hand, some sports matches can make international relations worse. For instance, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big matches in two countries where full of tensions overflow. Sometimes, after the matches, the two rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing games affect the players directly. As far as I know, a couple of Korean players in Japan are suffered from invisible discrimination after the match between two countries.

In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be one of the good ways to ease tensions or to release patriotism safely. However, I believe that games can not be the fundamental ways for the sound patriotism or peaceful international relations.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256559766764 0.247107183377 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.125364431487 0.155533422707 81% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113702623907 0.0946595960268 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0524781341108 0.0501214627716 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0349854227405 0.0437548338989 80% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128279883382 0.122226691241 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0233236151603 0.0403226058552 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72352928543 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0116618075802 0.0326793684256 36% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0962099125364 0.0861772015684 112% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0204081632653 0.021408717616 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00874635568513 0.011925033212 73% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1950.0 1933.35771543 101% => OK
No of words: 312.0 316.048096192 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375 0.374742101984 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.291666666667 0.28420135186 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211538461538 0.203846283523 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125 0.137316102897 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72352928543 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.037074148 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570512820513 0.56093040696 102% => OK
Word variations: 61.5954740864 60.7387585426 101% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.9131388127 49.517814964 42% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.875 127.492653851 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.814263465372 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 48.6666666667 49.1944974215 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.91780821918 1.69124875643 113% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366712522358 0.332605444948 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.115505745373 0.102741220458 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0721832083979 0.0668466124924 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.521713944505 0.534860350844 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126962482936 0.148594505496 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137954018179 0.134430193775 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072285111609 0.0742795772207 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.286401550606 0.324371583561 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0391609934864 0.0638462369009 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244380910223 0.228012699653 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509621433895 0.058150111329 88% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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