The professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than entertainment personalities. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

The professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than entertainment personalities. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

For many years, the distribution of country's wealth has been debated. Some have advocated giving highly qualified professions such as doctors and teachers high wages than actors or sportsmen. I completely agree with this notion for several reasons.

Nowadays, movie stars and football players are gaining much popularity and receiving all the attention either from public or the government. That is why they are paid high salaries compared to other people working in other jobs in the same community. That maybe due to the fact that these actors and sportsmen who are poorly qualified are considered as role models for many especially children.

Nevertheless, the vast majority of people think these stars are over-rated since they have no essential role in the country's renaissance. Conversely, health and education are the cornerstone in any country's development and prosperity. Accordingly, people working in these fields should be paid salaries higher than other fringe jobs for several reasons. 

Firstly, health care professionals and teachers spend tremendous effort and long time to be highly qualified. Moreover, paying attention to these highly qualified jobs would encourage young generations to attain these prestigious jobs. For example, if doctors and teacher were paid high salaries, children would be encouraged to study hard to be qualified to attain these careers.

In conclusion, although entertainment may be an important aspect of our life, this does not justify paying people working in this field higher than other vital jobs. It is high time doctors and teacher were paid wages higher than actors or sports stars.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, conversely, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5753968254 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97540465816 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7468511124 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.076923077 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141022938751 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488572138821 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553032251748 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080476255955 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358454235729 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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