Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

It is undeniably that they are wealthy and poorer nations around the globe. Wealthy nations are perhaps the developed countries which include the United Kingdom and European countries whereas the poorer nations are the developing ad undeveloped nations such as Africa and India. Many people argue that wealthy nations should share their wealth among poorer nations by providing food and education, for example. Nevertheless, other people argue it is the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves. I agree that wealthy nations should help poorer nations with the provision of basic needs.

First of all, in my opinion, I feel that wealthy nations should share wealth with poorer nations for the sake of peacefulness. In the history, we learn that some countries were involving in wars as the citizens were not fulfilled with basic requirements. When people are not provided in food, they will rob others. One point worth mentioning is that education is very important to a country as literacy will lead people to think rationally. I have to admit that people tend to commit crime for living if they are not fulfilled with basic needs, if they run to other countries for basic needs, there will be severe impact on those countries whereby a portion of their food production have to be distributed to them. For example, North Korea is always in wars as people are hungry and education is not provided.

Some people assume that the government of poorer nations should be wholly responsible for their citizens and wealthy nations should not share their wealth with poorer nations. Their belief is that wealthy nations were once poorer nations before they became wealthy. They argue if these countries were hardworking in food production, they will not face suc problem. They do not think of the repercussion of not lending hands to poorer nations might lead to war. As the world is becoming globalised nowadays, therefore, the wealthy nations should share some wealth with poorer nations. Who knows one day these poorer nations might help wealthy nations in the future.

In conclusion, I have to confess that the sharing of wealth by wealthy nations with poorer nations will only bring benefits to the world. Thus, I think the wealthy nations can help poorer nations by investing in these nations financially. It is understandably that when poorer nations are able to a job from multinational companies, their basic needs which include food and education are fulfilled. In consequently, they will not commit crime or have war. This strategy is considered a one stone killed two birds strategy as the wealthy nations will get profits from the investment and poorer nations will have their countries’ economy developed.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... share some wealth with poorer nations. Who knows one day these poorer nations migh...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'whereas', 'for example', 'i feel', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'first of all', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263265306122 0.247107183377 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.171428571429 0.155533422707 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0857142857143 0.0946595960268 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0448979591837 0.0501214627716 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0591836734694 0.0437548338989 135% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126530612245 0.122226691241 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0326530612245 0.0403226058552 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61482711765 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0265306122449 0.0326793684256 81% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0714285714286 0.0861772015684 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.034693877551 0.021408717616 162% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0102040816327 0.011925033212 86% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2780.0 1933.35771543 144% => OK
No of words: 452.0 316.048096192 143% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15044247788 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.20517956788 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396017699115 0.374742101984 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272123893805 0.28420135186 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.152654867257 0.203846283523 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112831858407 0.137316102897 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61482711765 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.037074148 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.41592920354 0.56093040696 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.5961605357 60.7387585426 75% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0891783567 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5454545455 20.7743622355 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.434639808 49.517814964 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.363636364 127.492653851 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 20.7743622355 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.772727272727 0.814263465372 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 47.757843926 49.1944974215 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.53333333333 1.69124875643 91% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.618748750235 0.332605444948 186% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144602031032 0.102741220458 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.075160978182 0.0668466124924 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.524698458899 0.534860350844 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133426199414 0.148594505496 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.253929573331 0.134430193775 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146768627842 0.0742795772207 198% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.466715438189 0.324371583561 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0909792392833 0.0638462369009 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.48186208978 0.228012699653 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132340673057 0.058150111329 228% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 2.5751503006 388% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 10.4468937876 211% => OK

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9