In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of food is on the rise. It is agreed that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast food companies. Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that alcohol and tobacco companies already pay higher taxes and secondly, discuss how higher taxes would raise prices and lower consumption, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

Higher excise on liqueur and cigarettes has proven to be successful at curbing the harm caused by these substances. This revenue has been used to treat health problems associated with these products, has proven useful in advertising campaigns warning people about the dangers of alcohol and tobacco abuse and tax from fast food could be used in the same way. The United Kingdom is a prime example, where money from smokers is used to treat lung cancer and heart disease. However, some may argue that alcohol and tobacco are addictive substances and fast food should not be treated in the same way.

Increasing taxes would raise prices and lower consumption. Fast food companies would pass on these taxes to consumers in the form of higher prices and this would lead to people not being able to afford junk food. For instance, the cost of organic food has proven prohibitively expensive for most people. Despite this, people in many developed countries, where the problem is most acute, can afford price hikes and will continue to eat high fat meals.

In conclusion, junk food should be taxed at a higher rate because of the good precedent set by alcohol and tobacco and the fact that the increased cost should reduce the amount of fast food people buy. Finally, it is predicted that with the ever increasing health problems associated with obesity, governments are sure to introduce some kind of ‘fat tax’ in the near future.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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..., followed by a reasoned conclusion. Higher excise on liqueur and cigarettes ...
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...uld not be treated in the same way. Increasing taxes would raise prices and ...
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Line 9, column 203, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to junk'
Suggestion: to junk
...lead to people not being able to afford junk food. For instance, the cost of organic...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to price'
Suggestion: to price
...e the problem is most acute, can afford price hikes and will continue to eat high fat...
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Suggestion:
...will continue to eat high fat meals. In conclusion, junk food should be taxed...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'in the same way']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.28611898017 0.247107183377 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.175637393768 0.155533422707 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0906515580737 0.0946595960268 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.028328611898 0.0501214627716 57% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00849858356941 0.0437548338989 19% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.124645892351 0.122226691241 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0736543909348 0.0403226058552 183% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.45122844305 2.80594681477 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0226628895184 0.0326793684256 69% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0906515580737 0.0861772015684 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0396600566572 0.021408717616 185% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00849858356941 0.011925033212 71% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1923.0 1933.35771543 99% => OK
No of words: 321.0 316.048096192 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99065420561 6.12580529183 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20517956788 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.348909657321 0.374742101984 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.227414330218 0.28420135186 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146417445483 0.203846283523 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.11214953271 0.137316102897 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45122844305 2.80594681477 87% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.037074148 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495327102804 0.56093040696 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.2436990425 60.7387585426 83% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 24.6923076923 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3210661435 49.517814964 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.923076923 127.492653851 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.99599198397 125% => OK
Readability: 47.4337407141 49.1944974215 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.28 1.69124875643 135% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317262143803 0.332605444948 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.134379288227 0.102741220458 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0722021615358 0.0668466124924 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.56792455636 0.534860350844 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.127535958449 0.148594505496 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1485985872 0.134430193775 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854489539927 0.0742795772207 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.317040250431 0.324371583561 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0141778608704 0.0638462369009 22% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236862067268 0.228012699653 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313573575286 0.058150111329 54% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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