In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?!

Essay topics:

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?!

Some youngsters encourage to travel and work in the last year of their high school and before entering university. I absolutely do not support this action. While, I need to understand why some teenagers choose that way. In some places, many high school students have no enough money to finish their school-year. To solve this problem, in the spare time and holiday, they work very hard to earn money, so they can pay fee for the last semester.
In a small town of developing country, usually, school boys cannot access information relates to majors in university. They are getting confuse in deciding their future. Sometime, they prefer to work in the edge of year as uniformed student as pre-employer. Therefore, They can learn few things about working. This step hopefully gives them view about the job they want in the future by choosing a match major.
Somehow, working at those time can disturb their time study. Moreover, they need to prepare final examination to graduate from school. Their preparation for determining major will be useless if they cannot pass the examination. In this case, a student must focus on how to pass the examination. This is because passing final examination and accepted in university are two different steps.
However, for outstanding student who can do both-study hard and working, equally, they are exception. But, if I can recommend an advice, it is better to stay study and do some consultations with teachers to choose major, than earning experience as employer. To be noted, this condition is only for students who have no economicall crisis. Meanwhile, government should help student crisis problem, then they can focus to study.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'traveling', 'travelling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: traveling; travelling
Some youngsters encourage to travel and work in the last year of their high...
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Line 2, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rmed student as pre-employer. Therefore, They can learn few things about working....
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Line 4, column 214, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
...e consultations with teachers to choose major, than earning experience as employer. T...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06137184116 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72752223631 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610108303249 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5491266343 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.7894736842 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5789473684 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84210526316 7.06120827912 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203373014154 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654297516742 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804895331092 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130641305885 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106741522398 0.056905535591 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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