In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?

There is often debate about children achieving their goals from hard work in some cultures.
Children can achieve their goals form doing too much trying and trust themselves in performance when they grow up, but there are drawbacks to be considered.
On one hand, there are a number of advantages to children doing hard work to achieve their dreams.
Firstly, children learn from their faults. It means that when children try to solve any problem in school or in his life and fail to do it, they try to use another way or strategy to tackle their problems as a result, they learn to use a variety of methods to solve their problems.
Secondly, he learns to deal with social problems by trying a lot. So, when he grows up, he can take a design about any situation and never give up. For example, a recent study in the UNITED ARAB EMIRATES showed that children who think about their desire dreams to be achieved can perform faster than who has afresh solution. Thirdly, give a chance to children to use their problem- solving skills to deal with anything they aim to achieve and trust themselves. Consequently, it establishes a new generation which, can take a design about their future.
On the other side, one problem when children doing hard work to achieve anything is that children think that anything we can achieve as if it is illegal in their society .as long as you use your thoughts to perform, you can do anything without punishment. So, parents should help their children to differentiate between things they can do and things we could not achieve because of prohibition.
Another possible issue is that children lose self-confidence when they try more without any support from society or their parents. for instance, students who try a lot to perform in a useful way and fail after a lot of attempts, think about isolation and become dependable.
In conclusion, while children can benefit from their attempts when they try to achieve their dreams, it can also lead to selfishness and get rid of dreams.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78779069767 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5236827819 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491279069767 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0652794121 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.8 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330295575465 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135175430374 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657224439399 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187891114736 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391072924811 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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