In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving such a message to children?
If children work hard enough, they can possibly achieve things, that they are passionate about. This is how children are advised in some cultures around the world. Parents intend to guide their offsprings in a progressive way, inorder to bring the best of their children, while many don’t consider the string attached to it. This essay aims to address both positives and negatives of this parental advice given to children, with supportive examples and arguments.
On the one hand, despite the differences among cultures, some of them have similar ideology in teaching their children. There are multitude of advantages, when parents encourage their child’s passion, by providing moral support and advice to work harder. For instance, children will develop self-confidence, dedication, perseverance, smart work and hard work will develop their ability to withstand any stressful situations. As this helps them to work on pursuing their passion, and eventually they have higher chances of achieving what they dreamed about. In addition they will find new pathways to succeed in their life.
Conversely, young children can easily take advantage of this situation. While some others may dream about goals that are practically unachievable, however they work really hard and end up hurting themselves physically and mentally. Moreover, some people don’t actually know the possible consequences of what they are hoping to achieve. Example of this scenario can be seen in the life of Kalpana chawla - an American Indian astronomer, who made every women proud by creating new platform and setting new limits. However, at the end, she met a horrible accident while returning back to earth. The space craft she travelled burst into flames while entering the atmosphere. Thus, such situations are quoted as extreme examples on what might happen if one chaces their dream
To conclude, parents and progressive thinkers in a society has to be appreciated for creating a sense of self-importance and confidence among the young children of the society. Eventhough it has been highly beneficial for the majority, it is important to shed light on the possible drawbacks of such teachings in the life of their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
If children work hard enough, they can possibly achieve things, that they are passionat...
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Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...f achieving what they dreamed about. In addition they will find new pathways to succeed ...
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Line 5, column 568, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'returning'.
Suggestion: returning
... end, she met a horrible accident while returning back to earth. The space craft she travelled...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, conversely, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, thus, while, as to, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34957020057 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79974488634 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595988538682 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9882143977 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.823529412 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280804289073 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964182192516 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906542657261 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171068199301 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649830786143 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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