In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Essay topics:

In some cultures,children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In many countries, it is common for children to be told anything can be achieved by hard work. In my opinion, this can lead to great achievements, but for some children it becomes as full expectation to the successful future.
Children usually have numerous dreams and they think everything is possible. When adults encourage them to do hardamd achieve goals, it pushes them to do their best through working hard and staying positive. For example, many candidates who wants to win grand to USA, set goals ahead then do their best working hard and efficiently. The study in the USA isnpire them to study hard and achieve great results.
However, this hard work can cause some problems for children. Firstly, due to believing in everything is possible that they may expect a perfect future after their efforts. Unfortunately, not in all cases it can be successful, adults should teach children to be realistic and deal with failures. For instance, children may expect to become a manager or director of some companies if they try hard, but when they do not reach those positions,they become frustrated or stressed.
To conclude,it will be better to teach children both positive and negative sides of life,not only encouraging them to be the best,but telling them that failures can occur unexpectedly.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in all cases, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1086.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 216.0 315.596192385 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02777777778 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77888866676 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601851851852 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 506.74238477 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2870843294 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7272727273 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308464378606 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126814828443 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833100986868 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186726080439 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998342320223 0.056905535591 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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