In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage

Children problems have always been the mainstream topic for debate on around the world. In some society, youngsters are made to believe that anything they want can be paid off by their had effort. This message obviously include both pros and cons, which I will discuss in this essay.
On the one hand, this statement may benefit children with their belief in success. They would feel more motivated and self-confident as they believe that as long as they make enough efforts, they can get the accomplishments. Therefore, this message also play a crucial role in enhancing children's independence and self-esteem. For example, when a kid perceive he can drive a toy car if he try and eventually he can complete it, he will be more confident in his self about driving and will not ask for any favor the next time he do it. That is how this message improve children physically health and their perspective.
However, on the other hand, there are several drawbacks that result from telling children those things. In case the kids try their best but they cannot achieve the expected results, they will undoubtedly disappointed about themselves. Thus, this problem results in the less confidence and the skeptic in their ability. Furthermore, in contrast, the kids who be told that would underestimate the value of the accomplishments. They simply believe only effort decide their achievement without deliberating the strategic manners to comprehensively achieve it. Thus, their big-headed feeling may be the vital factor results in their failure.
In conclusion, everything has its benefits and drawbacks, this message is not an exception. Children is innocent, we must demonstrate really comprehensive messages, which do not affect significantly to their physical belief and do them a favor to help them find their ways to get rid of any risks associated with persistent failure and capable skeptics.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16558441558 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93789908849 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607142857143 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6938378417 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4375 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260819546664 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856999281656 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608201188141 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153522005007 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652471750006 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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