In many cultures, children have been educated about the importance of efforts, in which it sufficiency can guarantee an entire achievement. While this view can be beneficial, I opine that it offers more drawbacks.
On the one hand, residents justify that emphasizing the essence of endeavor can help their offspring instill positive traits. Indeed, children are inherently susceptible with a didactic approach, so when it comes to their knowledge that striving is fruitful, they are more likely to set determination as a norm. As a result, youngsters are believed to be more consistent, which has been proved to lay the foundation for success. For example, after a short-term training in military, where the slogan “never give up” was highlighted, 100 Vietnamese children reported that they not only were able complete demanding physical activities, but also become self-motivated to enhance their academic performance. In other words, regardless of if it is identical to actual life, the consensus that effort assures every achievement positively influences on shaping a child’s values and personalities, prompting them to maintain their enthusiasm in any task. By contrast, the less motivation citizens channel into missions, the less likely they are to succeed.
On the other hand, in my opinion, exaggerating the value of effort can be detrimental to a comprehensive development of children. From a mental perspective, if achievement is attributed to nothing but endeavor, failures even when they try their best can be seen as a sign of competence austerity to children. Consequently, they tend to have an inferiority complex, which results in a lack of self-confidence, or even mental health problems. In addition, from a moral perspective, “trying” is sometimes misperceived and taken into extreme by youngsters, obliging them to realize their ambitions at any cost. Therefore, moral character erosion has been witnessed, in which juvenile delinquents disobeyed the law, violated codes of conduct in hopes of achievement.
Briefly, while not disavowing the advantages, it seems to me that telling next generations to try hard for every success is problematic due to its shortcomings.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52212389381 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27348576479 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625368731563 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4437988786 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.714285714 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20410554434 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632516206956 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489272408294 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110689379435 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374417743148 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.51 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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