In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Some people believe that children should be advised to work so hard to get whatever they want. In my opinion, although this mindset can help children to become globally competitive, it has also negative results on the emotional and mental health of children. This essay will take a look at both sides of the argument.
On the one hand, it is true to believe that children are the hope of the nation, and teaching them to become passionate to strive for success is essential. By doing this, self-motivation and effort will be their weapons to achieve invincibility. A recent study shows that 70% of parents these days giving their children the mentality of hard work and perseverance as this is the only way to pursue their dreams. If children would be molded to become ambitious, their goal in life would be surely achieved in the future.
On the other hand, a competitive mindset has drawbacks in the children’s well-being. Children can unconsciously suffer from a delusion of grandeur in which winning is considered as their only way to show the power and intelligence. Moreover, because of striving hard to achieve something, children could feel a sense of unfulfillment if the goal was not met which could lead to depression. An example of this nowadays is the insecurity and pressure for adolescents which are the leading cause of committing suicide. This only means that children should not be told to become perfectionist as it could be the reason for discontentment.
In conclusion, there is no denying that the mentality of being futuristic is important for children in achieving goals but parents should limit expectations. A mindset that just focusing on the brighter aspect of life is much better in molding children positively.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0206185567 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95317191502 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549828178694 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1585553955 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.357142857 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265297941899 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921113075737 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449220464723 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16700276566 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489019055073 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.