In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In same societies, children are advised saying that they can achieve anything if they workhard. There is a common saying "Every coin has two sides" so, definitely there will be advantages and disadvantages. Let us discuss the pros and cons of this statement briefly.
Firstly, I would discuss the advantages of the above notion. Personally what I feel is that the children should be encouraged by their parents or teachers so that they can boost themselves and learn to rectify their mistakes. If you castigate them, the children might get disappointed and will definitely gets discouraged. So, we need to make children understand that they can achieve anything in this world by doing hard work. Nothing is impossible in this world. Unless a person tries to work hard to achieve the target, it will become an arduous task for him to succeed. The positivity in children can be build up with the help of parents and teachers. These two play a vital role in a student's life. As they are the ones who can make him believe in himself that he has the potential to work hard. For instance, let us consider a scenario where a student has scored less marks in a subject. Now, he has worked hard but has the fear to re-write the exam because he thinks that he might score less marks again. Here if his parents or teachers cheers him up, he can overcome his fear and can attempt the exam in a successful way.Besides this situation, sometimes what happens is that the student takes up the things very seriously in his life. He thinks that ending up his life would be the solution for it. But, this not the correct approach for it. Here also the parents and teachers should boost the child.
In contrast to, let us talk about the disadvantages about the notion. In my ideology, the children should not be pressurized with regard to studies.Though, there might be children who can cope up things in a faster manner, but there are few who are quite slow. For this kind of children we should never pressurize them. Let them take their own time to workhard.In addition to it, there are also few children who take things seriously. They workhard in a such a way that they do not take care of their health. This leads to plethora of health issues in children.
We all know that "Health is Wealth", if health does not support us then it will become an onerous for us to achieve the target.
Finally, I would say that never force the children to do the task. Let them do on their own.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[1]
Message: Verbs 'advise' and 'remind' are used with infinitive: 'to say'.
Suggestion: to say
...In same societies, children are advised saying that they can achieve anything if they ...
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Line 2, column 305, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...ht get disappointed and will definitely gets discouraged. So, we need to make childr...
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Line 2, column 689, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...chers. These two play a vital role in a students life. As they are the ones who can make...
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Line 2, column 704, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o play a vital role in a students life. As they are the ones who can make him beli...
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Line 2, column 869, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun marks is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...r a scenario where a student has scored less marks in a subject. Now, he has worked ...
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Line 2, column 994, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun marks is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...m because he thinks that he might score less marks again. Here if his parents or tea...
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Line 2, column 1109, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a successful way" with adverb for "successful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rcome his fear and can attempt the exam in a successful way.Besides this situation, sometimes what ...
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Line 2, column 1129, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
...an attempt the exam in a successful way.Besides this situation, sometimes what happens ...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Though
...t be pressurized with regard to studies.Though, there might be children who can cope u...
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Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...et them take their own time to workhard.In addition to it, there are also few chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, briefly, but, finally, first, firstly, if, so, then, for instance, i feel, in addition, in contrast, kind of, in contrast to, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 24.0651302605 283% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 444.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60810810811 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57838719221 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477477477477 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7995755787 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7777777778 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4444444444 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.74074074074 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290830262962 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817933529508 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863105248114 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146477736902 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0895690734037 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.0946893788 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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