In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In some nations that many parents in this modern society want to promote their children to be more soiled, ambitious in life by convincing them with a school of thought that they can make everything possible if they attempt a suffice hard woking. From my perspective, this message can benefit their’s mindset as an inspiration to chase their dream. However, it can cause some negative consequences.
On the one hand, there are numerous advantages that come from this message. Initially, this message can motivate their child on the pursuing passion route. In detail, when children start to make their dream rely on these reminders, they try hard to make the dream become reality. Thus, they are taught and trained personal perseverance, avidly doing not easy to give up. moreover, on the way to achieve their dream, they encounter various challenges which may beat them down, by teaching this message, parents can help children overcome life struggles, become tough guys and have faith in themselves.
On the other hand, this message causes some serious education problems. Firstly, due to children who strongly held this belief that everything is possible, they may set overwhelming and unrealizable goals. For instance, they think of a head manager life at twenty or become a millionaire with a luxury living standard. secondly, children can wipe themselves out by put pressure and tension on their shoulders whenever they can not obtain their targets. Hence, they do not accept their failure and feeling guilty and self-deprecating. As a result, children suffering from mental health problems such as nervous disorders or autism.
In conclusion, although, the message of working hard is beneficial to the evolution of the children by pushing them toward their dream, nevertheless, it also results in some self frustration issues.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: Did you mean 'their' or 'theirs'?
Suggestion: their; theirs
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...lionaire with a luxury living standard. secondly, children can wipe themselves out by pu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25850340136 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75426207066 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0062764576 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.066666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1333333333 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357466187436 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117566293364 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443687659004 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224232011675 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548237294429 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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