In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages of giving children this message?
In this day and age, along with the rapid development of technology, humans always have to push themselves more in order to keep pace with the world. There are many children across countries who are encouraged to try their best and, therefore, can achieve everything. I believe the merits of this encouragement will outweigh the demerits.
Turning to the disadvantages side, the first foremost drawback is that these encouragements can make children daydream incorrectly about their goal. In other words, they can not realize their true ability or position and set a very unrealistic goal. For instance, some children are urged to dream about becoming a superhero or spiderman. Hence, it is obvious that there will be no probability for those dreams to turn into reality. Once such children can not achieve those goals, they may become pessimistic and behave in a negative way.
On the other hand, there are several compelling benefits. Firstly, children will be more energized and have more belief once they have a goal. This goal will play a vital role in one’s life as a motivation to push people through a diversity of difficulties and adversities. In addition, having a goal and motivation means individuals can be nurtured their soul and boosted their creativity. As a result, such people will have more bravery to go and try in a new path that nobody has done before. Yet a mere motivation is insufficient to contribute to success without any hard work. The harder they work, the more successful they will be.
In conclusion, urging children to dream and accomplish goals will have more benefits than drawbacks. However, it still depends on how such children are encouraged.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05357142857 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80878496136 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8184922688 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.2352941176 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4705882353 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.17647058824 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225911748268 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749259502265 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588857801086 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137336439823 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366897296579 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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