Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Raising kids is always a familiar and argumentative topic as it determines what future generations will become. While some said that empowering children to make their choice of everyday needs is crucial to their development, others contend that this will rather bring about negative consequences to society as the next population is likely to be selfish. From my perspective, I agree with the latter opinion.
Admittedly, giving children the freedom to decide things in their daily lives is believed to be important as it hones their necessary skills such as decision-making. This is because when some concerns appeared, they have to analyze the situation and think critically and carefully themselves in order to find out what is the best solution least undesired impacts. Moreover, people believe that unless they have these experiences, they will be independent and rely on their parents even when getting older. However, in my opinion, these lines of reasoning are not sound as children are not mature enough to consider a matter wisely but follow more their temporary feelings, which may result in some bad habits or even detrimental actions
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Besides, providing children the privileges to choose between options in ordinary matters will make them become self-centered individuals. Given their childish behavior, they are likely to prefer the best one or the one they like most when being allowed to make decisions. So when parents comply with their wishes every time and for a long time, it makes children think that having their favorite options is apparent and undoubted in all situations, which may form in them conceited attitude. Furthermore, this tends to last until these children have grown, and it is likely to say that when there are communal issues, they will care about others’ preferences when making a decision, just concentrate on the things that benefit them most.
In conclusion, I believe that children should not be given such liberty when they are still young, due to the adverse effect regarding their immaturity, which can lead to egocentric behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: solution the least
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Suggestion: .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, however, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24776119403 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74068200791 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0649605469 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.5 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9166666667 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29080312053 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999941021102 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683878358412 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168213705536 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346370251132 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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