There are many people believe that a good way to improve social well-being is to decrease the gap between the rich and the poor. While I think the point of view holds a ground, I presume there are other factors might affect the balance amogst our social members as well.
On the one hand, a society which is in favor of the people in some comparative disadvantaged situations can help improve the happiness for all the members. If people were given the fair public educational opportunities, our society would benefit from a higher level of educated workforce in job market. Therefore, the intelligence and creativity of those workers cultivated and developed by the social fair educational resources’ allocation are the driven force for national long-term development. When it comes to the public healthcare system, for example, the more people can be absorbed and secured by an all-round social welfare, the better sanitary performance could be achieved. In addition, each member of a society are more likely to behave positively and be happier.
On the other hand, even though the measures made inclining to the poor is playing a vital role to overall pleasure, the willingness of pursuit happiness can’t not be treated as irrelevant. Firstly, no matter how much encouragement being given and resources being invested, there is no doubt what truly trigger the motivation is derived from one’s longing for a better quality of life. It would be merely a huge waste of our precious resources if a person had no desire to do his utmost to achieve his potential. By contrast, the great deal of accomplishments could be completed by excellent productive social members with maximizing the same social public support. Hence, the talent and the diligent deserve to be prioritized to make more contributions to our societies.
In conclusion, although it is true that more happiness would be provided to our society, if the disadvantaged could be lifted up from the poverty, I believe that the effort made personally also count.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13173652695 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95642271962 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574850299401 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.1292878948 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.846153846 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0843668879157 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353805294441 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432629204159 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.053365519784 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333899068643 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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