Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give re

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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, after-school activities are more becoming a source of debate amongst educationalists. Although there is not a consensus on doing honorary services as a mandatory part of high school, it is believed that any sort of such a charitable contribution to communities not only is useful for society but it efficiently also benefits student in matter of acquirement of skills and development of self-confidence.

Earlier exposure to practical activities and playing role in the society, during the high school, helps our children to develop their abilities, in addition to progress their academic education. Additionally, Self- respect is instilled to children’s mind and also a sense of importance are imparted to them simply through voluntary collaboration with school’s or even city’s authorities in diverse affairs including assisting their classmates for acquisition of any language or sport, or more importantly, developing urban green spaces and etc. As a result, doing such these free of charge services not only lead students to actualize their potentialities and foster their skills but amazingly also pave the way for raising their employability in the future. Furthermore, it should be noted that adolescents are highly vulnerable with respect to the negative social teachings and these positives activities fully occupy their spare time in a utilitarian and constructive way and also avoid them perpetrating some silly actions.

On the other hand, every compulsory works, regardless of whether it is advantageous or not, may ironically have destructive impacts on individuals. Therefore, such charitable collaborations will be widely acceptable by society, if it is optional. However, such a generous task but mandatory, alters students’ eagerness to unwillingness. Take, a student passing a weary educating day at school and now he is obligated to work for a charity in his free time, for example. How enormously much would be loathsome this duty? Conspicuously, it adversely affects their views on any charitable actions.

To sum up, serving in a charity as after-school occupations which harness skills and time of teenagers in a best way seems worthwhile; nonetheless, it needs still to be optional part of school.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)

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after-school activities are more becoming a source of debate amongst educationalists.
after-school activities are becoming a source of debate amongst educationalists.

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'sort of', 'as a result', 'to sum up', 'with respect to', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240208877285 0.247107183377 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.13315926893 0.155533422707 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10182767624 0.0946595960268 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.088772845953 0.0501214627716 177% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0522193211488 0.0437548338989 119% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120104438642 0.122226691241 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0443864229765 0.0403226058552 110% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.24497724719 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0313315926893 0.0326793684256 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00261096605744 0.00163938923432 159% => OK
Determiners: 0.0704960835509 0.0861772015684 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0104438642298 0.021408717616 49% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00522193211488 0.011925033212 44% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2251.0 1933.35771543 116% => OK
No of words: 347.0 316.048096192 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.48703170029 6.12580529183 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.412103746398 0.374742101984 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.345821325648 0.28420135186 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.270893371758 0.203846283523 133% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.198847262248 0.137316102897 145% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24497724719 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.037074148 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613832853026 0.56093040696 109% => OK
Word variations: 72.9928055484 60.7387585426 120% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 26.6923076923 20.7743622355 128% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.6993613658 49.517814964 187% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.153846154 127.492653851 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6923076923 20.7743622355 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.38461538462 0.814263465372 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.99599198397 100% => OK
Readability: 61.2744402571 49.1944974215 125% => OK
Elegance: 1.47619047619 1.69124875643 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245363115479 0.332605444948 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0677403198225 0.102741220458 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0562674715773 0.0668466124924 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.52346296647 0.534860350844 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.221289383271 0.148594505496 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906504857499 0.134430193775 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577050240032 0.0742795772207 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.22391766305 0.324371583561 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0374231343513 0.0638462369009 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159779672146 0.228012699653 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257369227476 0.058150111329 44% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.4468937876 86% => OK

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Rates: 67.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9