Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both these views and give yo

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some people argued that the key in improving the health of the general public is by adding more leisure facilities while others had opposite views. I agreed to the latter view that there is far best method in keeping the people fit. This essay will evaluate two views before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.

To begin, there is a prolific increase of sports facilities in the major cities and towns. This trend is a result of growing personal awareness to keep the body in shape. These facilities provide various sports equipment to help toned the muscle in the body, as well as building stamina. For example, some of the membership gyms, which can found in huge shopping mall, enable them to be more visible and closer to people. Thus, this makes it clear that when people participate in a sports program, their health condition will suddenly improve.

However, others believed that sports houses provide a little help. They pointed out that it is not the lack of facilities or absence of opportunities that cause the failing public health, but rather the motivation factor of an individual. The most effective method is for the government to initiate an advertising campaign to motivate people to live healthily. This should educate the people of the outcome of a sedentary lifestyle and the possible illness it may bring. For instance, UK promotes a “Five Fruit a Day Campaign” and the rate of overweight reduced by 20% in a year. This clearly confirms that efficient government campaign worked to influence the wellness of the people.

In conclusion, although the presence of sports facilities contributes to general health of the people, I agreed that the government intensive campaign is the best option. It is recommended that government of other nations adopts the same approach for the betterment of the society.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.273273273273 0.247107183377 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.144144144144 0.155533422707 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0750750750751 0.0946595960268 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.039039039039 0.0501214627716 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.027027027027 0.0437548338989 62% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126126126126 0.122226691241 103% => OK
Participles: 0.024024024024 0.0403226058552 60% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67295595915 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.033033033033 0.0326793684256 101% => OK
Particles: 0.003003003003 0.00163938923432 183% => OK
Determiners: 0.141141141141 0.0861772015684 164% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015015015015 0.021408717616 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00900900900901 0.011925033212 76% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1849.0 1933.35771543 96% => OK
No of words: 304.0 316.048096192 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08223684211 6.12580529183 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424342105263 0.374742101984 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282894736842 0.28420135186 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203947368421 0.203846283523 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111842105263 0.137316102897 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67295595915 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.037074148 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569078947368 0.56093040696 101% => OK
Word variations: 60.7919185403 60.7387585426 100% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3942197424 49.517814964 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.5625 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.814263465372 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.99599198397 150% => OK
Readability: 47.2894736842 49.1944974215 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.01428571429 1.69124875643 119% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434233738221 0.332605444948 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106501557866 0.102741220458 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0771182622065 0.0668466124924 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.564507395284 0.534860350844 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.174696840697 0.148594505496 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186249923894 0.134430193775 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731475678752 0.0742795772207 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.495907886804 0.324371583561 153% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.115551495748 0.0638462369009 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325334070933 0.228012699653 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363838727744 0.058150111329 63% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 5.90881763527 203% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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