Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life.Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both views.

Essay topics:

Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life.Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both views.

It is true that many people consider job as one of the most important things in life because it helps them expand the relationship. However, others believe social life without work is much better. Both sides of the issue should be analyzed before I give my opinion.

On the one hand, plenty of people believe that most of our circle friends come from working environment. The first reason is that jobs in mordern day often require the interaction between people, which facilitates people to get aquaintance. For example, when employees join a project, they have to work in group, share their ideas as well as discuss the solutions with other colleagues in the organization; therefore, after the project finish, they might have more chance to know other employee and make friends with them. Working long-standing is another reason. People often work in a long time in their company before they retire, as a result, they are likely attached with those whom they colaborate. For instance, when they are sick, besides their family, only colleagues care for their condition of health. Over time, this helps all the people have a mature and useful relationship whenever they have difficulties.

On the other hand, others seem to avoid partners in the organization because this relationships likely lacks the reliance. Firstly, these people still believe that there is no relationship better than friends at school. Colleagues likely appear for benefits, even for exploitation, which makes them more unreliable. In addition, people often compete with other rivals in work to take their benefits. This shields them from sharing secrets of their life and feeling sympathy with the difficulties of rivals; therefore their relationship cannot go further if there is always a distance between them and others.

In conclusion, I think there are many ways to build relationships and people can choose anyone they are interested in as long as their friends are good enough.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...id partners in the organization because this relationships likely lacks the reliance...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17554858934 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68425702898 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6320359867 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.1875 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9375 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216123592977 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736638887027 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530822075498 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136647134971 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446538757583 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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