Recently, it has been argued if the surrounding could have detrimental effects on human-being. While I agree that living in big cities might jeopardize our health due to environmental contamination and shortages of time to take care of themselves, I also advocate that people who live in big cities might have numerous opportunities to improve their lives thanks to better healthcare and medical investment.
On the one hand, the booming of urban population might have a range of negative long-term consequence for human being. First, the higher population, the more emissions from vehicle, the more harm for people. For instance, a recent study by Hue Medical University found that people who lived in big cities were two-times higher respiratory disorder risks than the rural ones. Second, as a part of modernization process, people are becoming increasingly busy, then they are opting to buy fast food instead of self-catering ones. If this situation prolong, the harmful ingredients of junk food would definitely be involved in deterioration in their mental and physical health.
On the other hand, big cities often spend more state budgets on improving medical infrastructure. An optimal transportation framework allows an emergency patient to be visited doctors earlier. For example, a stroke person who lives in distant mountainous area might have more opportunities to be better recovery if he lives in a metropolis. In addition, that big cities have many fully equipped hospital is axiomatic, which enable people to be early screened for their health yearly in order to improve their health. In contrast, the rural, because of not approaching to modern health screening, often represent final stage of disease when seeing their doctor.
In conclusion, although I do not neglect the generally acknowledged drawbacks of living in metropolis, I believe that some aspects of city life are making life healthier for those who live there.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...me aspects of city life are making life more healthier for those who live there.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35714285714 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9870271033 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62012987013 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2506317105 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.923076923 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274344405048 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840507159142 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752830030453 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17061287161 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215059183542 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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