Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the works of their own countries instead of the work of art from other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the works of their own countries instead of the work of art from other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One of the most normal trends is an ever-changing world, appears to be toward spirit concentrating, such as the museums and art galleries, with the economical development. This trend, as it grows, has attracted attention in the view that whether it should focus on demoniacal domestic masterpieces or oversea’s ones. I argue that the International collection of artworks would bing enormous benefits.
Firstly, someone holds the views that it can positively contribute to cultural understanding. The knowledgeable people are challenge at a high enough level will consider what they should do in accepting the culture of intolerance can build up more sense of identity.
Another explanation is that viewed from the angle of the prosperity of cultural industry, museums and art galleries should house the relics from other countries. For example, for are lovers, both places open a gateway for them to appreciate a variety of artworks and antiques with distinct national identities, through which they can identify what connects and differentiates counties from each other.
Opponent, however, proponents of museums showcasing works from their own country ague that it can help domestic people build the connection with their native culture, because the internal works play a vital role in disseminate historical knowledge which are full of national significance. So, for instance, museums and art galleries should need to serve as educational centers where the local people can fully know their own history and gain the sense of belonging.Nevertheless, displaying works from other countries does not override the basic right of nations to preserve their own history.
In conclusion, museums and galleries should show their equal treatment of various culture. Only open our minds, can we create a more glorious atmosphere of culture.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...the museums and art galleries, with the economical development. This trend, as it grows, h...
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Line 4, column 466, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nevertheless
...history and gain the sense of belonging.Nevertheless, displaying works from other countries ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50530035336 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13568355086 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628975265018 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.4588133694 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.636363636 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7272727273 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.18181818182 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309815300816 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996113970057 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094798234697 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141570275036 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954221503089 0.056905535591 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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