Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the works of their own countries instead of the work of art from other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the works of their own countries instead of the work of art from other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As museums and art galleries have long been the forefront of preserving cultural values and histories, there has been much discussion about whether they should mainly display domestic cultural artefacts or a wider collection of artworks created by any artists from all over the world. As far as I am concerned, an international collection of artworks would bring enormous benefits.
Firstly, it can positively contribute to cultural understanding. Undeniably, not some people cannot afford to travel abroad and even if they do, they are unlikely to get to know foreign culture deeply as tourists. In this case, museums provide a great opportunity for the general public to be exposed to diverse culture, eventually enabling them to acquire the knowledge as to art, history and different minds.
Moreover, viewed from the angle of the prosperity of cultural industry, museums and art galleries should house the relics from other countries. For art lovers, both places open a gateway for them to appreciate a variety of artworks and antiques with distinct national identities, through which they can identify what connects and differentiates countries from each other. As a result, they can be inspired by those artworks and build their own aesthetic views, creating more works.
However, proponents of museums showcasing works from their own country argue that it can help domestic people build the connection with their native culture. If exposed to more exotic culture, the young might feel that their own culture does not deserve preservation. So, museums and galleries need to serve as educational centers where local people can fully know their own history and gain the sense of belonging. Nevertheless, displaying works from other countries does not override the basic right of nations to preserve their own history.
In conclusion, museums and galleries should show a mixture of works from their own country as well as other areas. From my perspective, individuals should have a broader view of culture in the context of globalization.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, as to, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31790123457 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81921595228 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58024691358 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6206630962 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.071428571 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34430240427 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117805348783 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944026189932 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187097470246 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786932515332 0.056905535591 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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